Here is the link as well- https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=j_-n-9wpoPQ
I really liked the feedback I got for the last elevator pitch. The comments were positive and helpful. I realized the strength of filming in a unique setting. People liked how I spoke and how I described the idea. Based on this feedback, I have made minor changes in this new elevator pitch such as trying to speak with more flow and include more information in the same amount of time to inform my audience even more.
Adam,
ReplyDeleteThe setting in your vehicle is good for the purpose of this pitch since you are promoting a seatbelt cover.
Some areas you could improve upon for next time are:
1) Dress in something more “professional,” even if just khakis or neat jeans and a polo shirt. If you are selling this to a wide audience, you will want to appeal to different types of people, and some of them will be professionals.
2) I think your first pitch from the driver’s seat was a better position compared with the passenger seat. It made you more visible, and there is also something symbolic and subliminal about being “in the driver’s seat.”
3) Start with a catchy opener. You could even shout out “ouch! That’s hot! I hate when that happens! My buckle just burned my hand!”
4) Have the car parked in the sunshine. You are talking about how a car gets hot in the sun, but it appears that you are filming from inside a garage. It would be more effective to have the sun beating on you.
I look forward to seeing what you do in your final pitch!
Susan
Hi Adam!
ReplyDeleteI loved your new pitch! My favorite part was that you actually sat in your car and then displayed it's purpose and did a demo of how it would be used. You were very clear on what exactly your product does and how it is used which is something most people easily over look. The only thing I would avoid next time is rambling. Try to get right to the point and create very concise sentences. Great work!
Adam,
ReplyDeleteI really liked the new pitch! I think you learned a lot from the last video but kept it within your product. I like how you brought the viewers into the car where your product is used, like last time, but expanded on the last video. Great Job!
Adam,
ReplyDeleteYour new elevator pitch is great! Your description of the invention in-person really helped me understand your idea for the design much more. I like how you used an all-black car to emphasize how hot it must get in that car. It's also a nice touch at the end describing all the perks and benefits to it.
Hey Adam,
ReplyDeleteI liked the way you added so much information about your product and how you explained how it works, its features, size and price. I think all this information would help grab the audience attention and it would make them want to know more about it. I think you could have been more dynamic though but it was a great idea to film your pitch in a car, great job!